Mar 7, 2014

The killer's distraction

“How many more must die?” she asked him angrily.
But his eyes remained focused on the targets running in front of him. Exasperation dripped from his voice as he responded.
“Just two more ghosts I have to kill and this level of Pacman will be complete, Mama! After that, I’ll come for dinner. Mommy promise!”


Author's note: This is my post for the "55 word fiction" prompt in Write Tribe's Festival of Words 3.

65 comments:

  1. Ha Ha Ha... So lovely...I didnt expect it

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    1. Glad I could lend a twist in the tale within 55 words :)

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  2. Oh this used to happen ALL the time back home! Gosh!

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    1. haha.. I think we all have seen this in our homes at some point of time :)

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  3. hee hee hee.. n i thot it will be some ghost hunter ka story ;)

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    1. Thats actually not bad.. i should consider that for the future :)

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  4. Ha Ha :) I was expecting a very serious story. Nice twist!

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    1. even i didnt know how it would end when I started typing :)

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  5. Aah... The first video game I ever played. I know the feeling. :)

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    1. hehe.. during our days, it was easily one of the most popular

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  6. aaha :) I was reminded of the duck hunt video game :D Well written, doctoree :)

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    1. i actually thought of putting that name.. then i wasnt sure if people would know it :)

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  7. Hehehe kids can be so stubborn... The addiction to these games are hard to.control though.

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    1. oh yes.. todays games are miles better than what we had!

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  8. HAAAAAAA HAAAAAAAAAAAAA HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA....
    I remember playing super mario and telling mom "MOM LET ME HAVE ONE MUSHROOM AND I WILL GROW UP AND THEN I CAN HAVE DINNER"
    :P

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    1. hehe.. oh I remember that game so well.. loved it better than Sonic the Hedgehog !

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  9. Thanks for reminding the pacman, the first computer game I had at school..

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    1. haha.. its a classic. nowadays in 3d!!

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  10. Great ! Roshan it happens with grown ups too. My DIL keeps every one waiting on the dining table with her, "Mom just coming"

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    1. haha.. glad to see nothings changed even now :))

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  11. That's the story of our son. Lol.. Roshan good one.

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    1. as u can see from the comments below, many kids (and even ex-kids?) share this same trait.

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  12. Ha ha ha that was really nice. even adult are addicted to these games.

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    1. now its more about mobile games, i guess!

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  13. Your humor stories always are too good! Awesome!

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    1. thanks man.. rarer now. i need to get more humorous posts in

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  14. LOL! That was cute! Great use of language!

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    1. thanks Michelle.. glad u enjoyed it :)

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  15. LOL this made me laugh!! This is such a familiar refrain and excuse at my house especially from my son!!! He loves his video games. I like them too. Recently we got both my daughter and son a Nintendo 3DS and some new games to keep them occupied while I play with my new games on the Wii. It is a win-win situation. The only problem is none of us want to break for dinner! LOL

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    1. wow... the family that plays together stays together, eh ? :) man... its been ages since i played a good computer game...

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  16. Hehehe.. This is awesome doctor! I have always appreciated bloggers taking interesting challenges like this one.. And this ended with the pacman game! All this in 55 words? Damn, that's creative.. No wonder the powers that be have considered you the best in this category :)

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    1. flattery will get u everywhere, my friend :) thanks.

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  17. This was my story for the last 3 months!! Good one, Roshan :)

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    1. haha.. only 3 months! many more to go :)

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  19. Lovely! One more proof of your creativity... Just 55 words and such a nice story! Hats off :)

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    1. thanks Karanth.. glad u think so :)

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  20. Roshan,I thought it was a mass murderer's story :) Good one.

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  21. LOL!!
    My mum would've pulled the plug! ;)

    nice story!

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    1. my parents were more accomdating when i was a kid.. even now, come to think of it...

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  22. Oh...wow just superb !! It made me laugh at the end :)

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    1. mission accomplished for me then :)

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  23. Me has done this a lot of times :D

    Richa

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  24. Very very creative Roshan..
    How did you get the idea???

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    1. haha.. honestly didnt even know how i was going to end it when i clicked the "type" button. just went with the flow... wanted to make ppl smile; that was the end goal. :)

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  25. Hahahaha... Cant stop laughing at this one.. Been there, done that ;)

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  26. Oh yes! Been there done that :D. Kids and their games!

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    1. join the club... lots more amongst these comments

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  27. Hahaha awesome end! Yeah, been there done that too! :)

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  28. Lol! Internet/gaming addiction --- one more minute!!! :)

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    1. haha.. always "one more minute" :)

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  29. That's absolutely delightful...crazy for ghost and damn addictive, I tell u:)

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  30. Beautiful rosh... You have become an expert i tell you.. every single post is different.. this one is just amazing... suspense created and revealed with 55words!! wow!!

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    1. Thanks man :) as I said, even I didn't know what I wanted to write when I started.. Just went with the flow. Wanted a happy post...

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  31. Gah! Reminds me of my husband! Brilliant take, Dr! :D

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  32. Good one :) For some reason, I was reminded of video games as soon as I read the first line. But never expected Pacman!! :)

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