PHOTO PROMPT - Kelvin M. Knight

"I want it." the little boy said, licking his lips as he stared at the last slice of bread lying on the plate. His mother's eyes however rested on the hollowed out shape her son had playfully carved into the bread.
"I want it too." she replied wistfully, her eyes never leaving the heart within the bread as she stroked the empty spot on her left finger where, a lifetime ago, a wedding ring had rested, blissfully unaware.


Authors note:

Linking this post to  Friday Fictioneers, hosted by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff – Fields. You can find other awesome entries to this week's Friday Fictioneers here.

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64 Comments

vishal bheeroo said…
Awesome. Both Mom and Son vying for the share of the pie. The desire and not sacrifice made this story shine through, doc.
Alice Audrey said…
It says a lot that the thing she wants is now what my art student daughter would call "negative space". Such a wistful story.
anupriya said…
So much said in so less words. Beautiful
Rajlakshmi said…
that ending is so emotional... Loved the way you weaved this story.
Parul said…
That's lovely. Well written and I could sense the pain too.
Luccia Gray said…
Lovely. I wonder who'll get it in the end?
Luccia Gray said…
Lovely. I wonder who'll get it in the end?
Linda said…
Bitter and sweet. Perspective makes all the difference.
Shalini said…
Sad! :( But what a beautiful take on the prompt! Loved it.
Yes, it is indeed the negative space in the pic that I was looking to factor in, both literally and metaphorically here.
Thanks Rajlakshmi :)
Glad I could convey it in less than a 100 words :)
remains to be seen :)
Dear Dr. Roshan,

Such a touching story in so few words. Welcome to Friday Fictioneers.

Shalom,

Rochelle
Paul Thompson said…
This is simple and lovely. Really nice.
Alana said…
Bittersweet ending. Loved it because I could feel the emotion of both the boy and his mother.
spicedmullings said…
I hope she lost him in death, not life!
So much emotion in such few words. Beautifully expressed doc!!

Prasanna from Team Mocktailmommies
Rekha Dhyani said…
Lovely little story that was, Roshan!I loved the ring part the most. Plus the fact that this is an open-ended story to which everyone can add a different story.
Thanks Alana... guess the attempt at flash fiction was successful then :)
I had a different ending in my head but it is definitely open to interpretation
Yes... I think the best place for the story to resonate in such cases is the reader's mind - each interprets the possibilities differently
Tina said…
Wow! Less is truly more in this tale. So much conveyed in such few words. For me, it came across as single mother....probably divorced, hurt, and longing for a man´s or companion´s love in her life. This is indeed sad and moving. Loved it! Will be coming back for more such awesome posts. Keep writing! :)
meha sharma said…
Loved it ! The sense of longing is beautifully depicted!
Soumya said…
Wow, so well done! The pain, the longing - all comes out so well.
That is perhaps closest to what I had imagine myself while writing this down.
Shilpa Gupte said…
Such varied emotions expressed in such a short piece, doc! Superbly crafted!
Ramya Abhinand said…
Both want the same piece but with a different perspective.. Probably thats the situation what we all humans are in at most times!
Ashwini Dodani said…
Sometimes a few words make a beautiful story which stays with you for long. Lovely piece, sir. :)
Aesha Shah said…
story of love!
Akshata Ram said…
Hauntingly beautiful Doc. You have a thing for romance, don't you?
Upasna said…
Its first time I am reading fiction from yours. Lovely!
tulika singh said…
That's beautiful - different people desire different things even when they look at the same.
ROHAN KACHALIA said…
This is brilliance. The way you have put out two different set of emotions in such less words is awesome.
Vinay Leo R. said…
Hunger and love... So different, so equally important. I wish she had had a better life, and he, the bread, and for both, the heart that was missing.
Gee said…
Saying much in few words is an art. New to your blog & completely mesmerised by your art of story telling. Subscribed and shall be back to read more!
In many ways, it is. This was a take on that.
It always is in some ways
Haha... I try to cater to all genres, usually
Glad you liked it :)
Exactly what I wanted to showcase
I figure he will get his bread soon enough... She would have to wait longer for that heart
Thanks. Hopefully I will live up to expectations
Chandresh said…
Wah doctor sahib :) ... you covered all in 4 line which people take entire novel to make people understand :)
Anubhuti Seth said…
Beautiful take with two different perspectives ..
Opinionatedmua said…
We all crave for love in one form or an another. Beautifully weaved story. :)
Thanks... thats high praise