Kiddo #FridayFotoFiction - GODYEARS

Kiddo #FridayFotoFiction

December 10, 2016


He watched as she drew random patterns upon her wedding dress. She leaned sideways, resting her meticulously-done hair upon his shoulders.
"I'm scared. I don't want it to..."
"It won't be." he finished. "Kiddo, you were young and immature back then. You will make a wonderful wife today. He's lucky to have someone like you."
She sighed, a smile peeking through the frown.
"Where were all these compliments back when we were married?"
"You are not the only one who's changed. Heck, I'm a hunk now, if you believe the rumours!"
She felt him flex his biceps under his shirt and grinned.
"Asshole." Her voice grew soft. "Thank you for coming."
"I was there for your first wedding too, remember? It is all about consistency, kiddo. Besides, I want to relax and actually enjoy the food this time around. First at the buffet line, baby!"
As her familiar giggle twinkled in his ears, his heart skipped a beat, stifling once more the loss he felt within, one he knew he could never undo in this lifetime.



Authors note:
The story is my take on the photo prompt offered by Mayuri and Tina for #FridayFotoFiction.
The challenge was to have a story made within 100 words. I decided to use a 'Stephen King' 100, which translates to an extra 75% than the limit! But then, I really wanted to tell this story.
You can read the versions of other authors here.

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41 comments

  1. Visiting from #FridayFotoFiction nice one, loved the last lines!

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  2. Awww..that was cute! And, I missed a heartbeat, too! :)

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    1. One of those 'relationship goals' even after the relation goes sour :)

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  3. Aww! What a beautiful relationship they share!! Loved this story, Roshan!!

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    1. Thanks, Shilpa :)
      We need more relations like this when the marriage ends instead of the ones we get.

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  4. This is such a heartwarming take on the prompt. You should write fiction more often on this blog :)

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    1. Guilty.. I used to write a lot in the past. Slowly diverted the stories for competitions and books.

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  5. Heart touching...wonderful narration <3 Such special bonds are rare.

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  6. Nice little take on the photo prompt, Doc.
    Glad to see your 'midas' touch is still prominent.

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    1. awww... thanks Sid. Yes, the fiction has become really rare at the blog :/

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  7. First, I thought, how nice that this couple managed to remain friends after their divorce. And second, how this man could watch the ex he still loved marry another man. Poignant.

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    1. Thanks... both the emotions I was looking to feature.

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  8. Awwwwww and WOW!
    Now this makes me want to go into your blog archives and look for your fiction posts!
    Thank you for writing for #FridayFotoFiction, Roshan :)

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    1. So many more like this are there if you click the 'storyteller' tag in categories...

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  9. This is just too adorable to handle... I so feel for the guy !

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    1. :)
      We learn from experience, right? And yet, sometimes we cannot undo the mistakes of the past...

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  10. I missed your short stories. Please do write more of them. Only you could have thought of such a heartwarming bond for this image :)

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    1. Thanks... been awhile since I saw you here too :) But yes, a random click of the Storyteller tag shows that I've hardly written fiction at the blog over the last 2 years.

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  11. Sigh!! this is so feel good heart warmingly wonderful Rohan!

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    1. Thanks.. as always wanted to try something different.

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  12. Aw that's such a sweet story of missed chances for some and second chances for others.

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  13. Aww..this is such a sweet story filled with emotions Doc. A very nice take on the prompt.

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  14. So romantic yet tragic.
    And I remember 'kiddo' being used elsewhere as well ;)

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    1. wow.. I am sure I have used it elsewhere but I honestly don't remember where... oh wait! In my message to you :D

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  15. Nice take Roshan. Things should move on .. even if the relationship once had a sour ending. It could bloom into another beautiful form right?

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    1. Yes... sometimes time gives us a new perspective; a chance at a different version of what we once had.

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  16. Nice take Roshan. Things should move on .. even if the relationship once had a sour ending. It could bloom into another beautiful form right?

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  17. Such a heart-warming story!Love from a different angle!Loved it

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  18. Lovely story, Roshan. I love how it captures both - the regret of lost love, as well as the hope that comes with second chances.

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  19. Hey JBo...(as in James Bond!)...;D You are the featured blogger for this week! Congrats and keep writing, entertaining and enlightening us with your words, doc!

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  20. Such positivity in this story. I wish more people could take their failed relationships so well. Beautifully written as usual, doc.

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  21. Adorable. My friend told a real life story like this. They are very rare. Between, that first in buffet line made me remind of you, Roshan. :)

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  22. Jean-Saul PartreJanuary 31, 2017

    I'll have lunch today with the boy I spent 7 years with when I was a kiddo. We have't met in 20 years...

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  23. So much in this short story... You wove in a lifetime. Nicely done.

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